Date: 2009-02-28 03:12 pm (UTC)

Yay, you did it! *g*

I really like the language choices you make for Cobra, the formality of their structure also a constant reminder of the POV we're inhabiting.

I also really like the difference between her prescribed life you present -- the robes and seclusion -- and where her mind takes her. For instance but when she peeked into their lavish tent, every ass she saw belonged to one or other of them is not suggestive of a mind that they've managed to control.

Ah and then the scene in the tent. *g* As she starts her search for Jack we get the chance to guess where he is and of course this is Jack so... *g*

Thank you Petal! ♥




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